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How do you like the first three chapters of a short teen book I'm writing?

Public Comments

1. That is ridiculously long. Just give an excerpt.
2. I've only read a little bit so far and I'm going to read more. From what I read, you are a good writer. I really liked it. You should post these on Quizilla. That's what I'm doing. :]
3. I think that it's pretty well written. I mean, I think it would be more interesting if one didn't get to know the characters so quickly. I think that readers want to have to endure some type of mystery as the characters get to tell you more about themselves. Well, there's that, and if this is a teen story, and they're sophomores, why would they practice nine hours? The marching band of the high school my sister attended only did four a day! Isn't that endangering students?
4. wow ur a great writer! but its kind of too girly for me
5. The only thing I noted was you spaced it at each paragraph instead of just using tab and the title should be Simply Lucy and the first chapter should be Zach or somthing. But oh my gosh! It was SO cute! I would love to read more! I'm 13, so it does appeal to me! I totally know what your talking about when you talked about it being weird, even though they were only 2 years apart! It's SO real! My email's bunny2459@hotmail.com THis is only if you want to send more! I would LOVE to read more, oh, and I took some extra classes on editing, so you can trust me, that is, if you want to! Bye!
6. This is very good. Except, for some spelling. In the beginning, say weekends instead of weeks. Excellent!