Crazy Hobbies
Can these sentances stay like this or they need revision?
1. "He tries to combine hobbies and profession in his spare time. So he is not just a good cyclist and footballer. Furthermore he is the developer of a succesful football-centered online platform." 2. "Matthias Seidl is not only an enduring marathon runner and triathlete. As passionate opera singer he demonstrates his lung capacity, too."
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- In both selections the sentences seem to need to be combined into one thought. 1) "Since he tries to combine hobbies and profession in his spare time, he is not just a good cyclist and footballer, he is also the developer of a successful football-centered online platform." 2) "Matthias Seidl is not only an enduring marathon runner and triathlete, he also demonstrates his lung capacity as a passionate opera singer." I hope this helps!
